Oh, as opposed to that other university where the professors aren’t dedicated to helping students succeed.

So how do you write sentences that sound like you actually want to go to the school? Like this:

I believe USC is perfect for me because, though other schools offer a Judaic Studies major, I have yet to find a program as comprehensive as USC’s. Take, for example, courses like “Biblical Hebrew” (as opposed to just Modern Hebrew) and “Why Be Jewish?”

Like a boss. Look how specific. Beautiful.

And another, from the same student:

Though the CogSci program at USC is in its inaugural year and little information was available during my open house visit, I was able to contact Associate Professor of Psychology and Linguistics Toby Mintz through email and was happy to discover that USC’s program is extremely interdisciplinary in nature, cross cutting traditional disciplines such as psychology, philosophy, linguistics, computer science, and anthropology. I have always been interested in languages (I speak three), consider computer science a strength and am drawn to the “Philosophy of Language” courses, as I recently wrote a research paper addressing the potential implications of applying J.L. Austin’s work with “performative utterances” to smart-phone technology.

Now that’s legit.

Has he demonstrated interest in the school? Yes.

Has he done his research? Oui.

Is he clearly showing why he’s specifically interested in USC while revealing more about himself? نعم.

Get it? Got it? Good.

And if you haven’t read it, here’s the full How to Write a “Why Us” Essay post.